Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

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Nowadays, most commonly
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don't show their interest
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choosing
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in many countries. There are so many reasons that
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not to choose
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there is an unpopular reason for non choosing
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as their
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. we are in the phase of facing the
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aspects. some biological needs may get drained. Other fields related to
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may get more
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