Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society? You should write at least 250 words.

Nowadays, most commonly
students
don't show their interest
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choosing
science
subjects
in
university
exams
in many countries. There are so many reasons that
defines
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the shortage of
science choosing
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students
.
This
essay demonstrates the reasons and explains the effects that society faces.
while
analysing the reason for those who don't choose
science
subjects
in
university
exams
, primarily, they felt tough on
subjects
that
deals
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with
science
. whatever it may be, the tough
subjects
are still learned by many
set
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of
students
but
still
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there are more
students
,
they
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who
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are in
decision
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of
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not to choose
science
subjects
in
university
exams
.
Additionally
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there is an unpopular reason for non choosing
science
subjects
is , choosing
commerce related
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subjects
. There are some
students
they
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who
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don't choose commerce
subjects
as their
carrer
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career
because they actually like
science
subjests
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subjects
. When we analyse the effects of
non choosing of
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science
subjects
. we are in the phase of facing the
non scintifical
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aspects. some biological needs may get drained. Other fields related to
science
subjects
may get more
demanded
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.
For instance
, excessively non choosing of
science
subjects
may get more popular.
To conclude
, there are some pros
can
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also
be defined in
the
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term
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of choosing
commerce related
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subjects
for the
university
exams
. There are more cons about the
non choosing
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of
science
subjects
. It can be resolved by the new education system.
the
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new education system refers to the
non acedamic
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non-academic
exams
. If there is an absence of academic
exams
there will be
a
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progress in choosing
of
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science
subjects
.
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