The pie charts give information about the proportoin males and females in employment in six categories divided into manualand non-manual occupations

The pie charts give information about the proportoin males and females in employment  in six  categories  divided into manualand non-manual occupations
These pie charts illustrate the percentage of male and female employees, who engaged in six different categories of either automated or labour-oriented jobs.
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considered,
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of the men were assigned to do manual jobs,
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most of the women were involved in non-manual occupations. As for the general labouring tasks, not more than 2% of either gender took part .
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3% of the women practised all things pertaining
crafts
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, 24% of their counterparts were involved. The proportion of either
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who were involved in other manual occupations
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were
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relatively the same with one exceeding the other only by a percentage. More male employees were engaged in managerial and professional duties
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36% more than the female workers.
On the other hand
, 31% of the female workers were clerks and only 6% of the opposite sex, occupied
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