The pie charts give information about the proportoin males and females in employment in six categories divided into manualand non-manual occupations
These pie charts illustrate the percentage of male and female employees, who engaged in six different categories of either automated or labour-oriented jobs.
Overall
, if the sum total of workers are
considered, Change the verb form
is
majority
of the men were assigned to do manual jobs, Correct article usage
the majority
while
most of the women were involved in non-manual occupations.
As for the general labouring tasks, not more than 2% of either gender took part . Although
,
3% of the women practised all things pertaining Remove the comma
apply
crafts
, 24% of their counterparts were involved. The proportion of either Change preposition
to crafts
sexes
who were involved in other manual occupationsChange to a singular noun
sex
,
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apply
were
relatively the same with one exceeding the other only by a percentage.
More male employees were engaged in managerial and professional duties Change the verb form
was
with
36% more than the female workers. Change preposition
apply
On the other hand
, 31% of the female workers were clerks and only 6% of the opposite sex, occupied this
position.Submitted by annodunowo on
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