The diagram below shows various stages involved in the production of beer.

The diagram below shows various stages involved in the production of beer.
The illustration presents an overview of the key stages involved in the manufacturing of beer from three main steps namely processing, packaging and delivering Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is evident that there are nine stages in the production of beer, starting with the milling of malted barley and culminating with the delivery of beers to customers. The whole
process
of beer starts when the malted barley has been milled in order to be broken down into small pieces.
After
this
particular
stage
has finished, the ingredients have been mashed with the supplement of water. Once
this
particular
stage
in the manufacturing
process
has been completed, it is
then
followed by being lautered, a
process
which results in spent grain animal feed. It Is at
this
particular point that the ingredients are put into high-temperature water with the addition of sugar and hops.
After
this
particular
stage
has finished, it is moved into a whirlpool. Once the
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yeast is fermented and emits Co2
as well as
weeds out yeast, it undergoes
a
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manufacturing.
Subsequently
, a penultimate
stage
in which filtering is carried out. It
then
leads to the final
stage
of the
process
where the ingredients have been packed in the form of either bottles or cans before being delivered to the market.
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