The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.
The different percentages of people's daily activity in a particular country in 1958 and 2008 are shown in the pie graph below.
The huge difference in percentages of activity is seen in the category of working. The amount
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, as statistic shows us, the daily routine of people from 2008 consisted of more working hours and having a rest after work, but in spite of increased time
spent at home people slept fewer hours.Submitted by ushak.2004.80 on
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