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The charts below show the average percentages in typicl meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The charts below show the average percentages in typicl meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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 three pie charts presented capture data describing the amounts of possibly detrimental supplements (
sodium
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, saturated fats, and
sugar
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) incorporated within four standard American meals. Broadly speaking, American citizens ingested the majority of their
sodium
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 and fat at
dinner
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,
while
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sugar
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 intake occurred mainly during snacks. Another general perspective finds that
breakfast
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 contained the lowest percentages for all three nutrients. A specific analysis reveals that the combined totals of
sodium
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 at
lunch
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 and
breakfast
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 equalled the 43% taken in at
dinner
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.
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, the tallied percentage for saturated fat consumption for snacks and
breakfast
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 matched the 37% digested during
dinner
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. In a
simillar
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similar
 manner to the previous points, consolidated
sugar
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 ingestion percentages at
dinner
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 and
lunch
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 paralleled the 42% eaten at snack time. Regarding Americans absorbing
sugar
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 in the course of the day, the percentage steadily rose by 3% between
breakfast
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 and
lunch
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, and
then
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 4% from
lunch
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 to
dinner
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. As opposed to the other nutrients, the citizens took in
sodium
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 at the same 14% for snacks and
breakfast
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. On a final note, between
breakfast
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 and
lunch
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, the saturated fat jumped 10% and
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 an additional 11% from
lunch
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 to
dinner
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, dinner, breakfast, lunch with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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