The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.

The chart below show the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008.
These two pictures express the
percentage
of days doing different activities in the given years in a given country. 33% of people spent working in 1958 and it and the
percentage
of sleeping had a small gap of 1%. Yet, the
figure
for sleeping was 16 times higher than the
percentage
of travelling to work. Only 8% of people were relaxing at home and it was two times lower than going out. In 2008, working accounted for 42% and the
figure
was five times higher than travelling to work. Interestingly, Doing other and going out were the same
percentage
. 13% of people were relaxing at home. It and the
figure
for sleeping had a big gap of 12%. The
figure
for sleeping accounted for 25%. In brief, the
figure
for working was the highest in 1958 and 2008.
By contrast
, travelling to work was the lowest
percentage
in 1958 and going out and doing other was the lowest
figure
in 2008.
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  • work-life balance
  • technological advancements
  • leisure activities
  • household chores
  • gender roles
  • modern lifestyle
  • fast food trends
  • sleep patterns
  • health and well-being
  • societal impact
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