The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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Given are two bar charts depicting the proportion and the average times of
women
and men involved in some kind of house tasks which are cooking, cleaning, pet care and house repairs. It is clear from the charts that the share of
women
are engaged in cooking and cleaning and the
time
they spend in these is
also
higher than the men’s. As per the chart, over 80% of
women
are involved in cooking, which is more than 20%
than
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men’s involvement. The
time
they spend in
this
is
also
almost equal
as
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their
participation
rate (Over 80
minutes
when compared to 60
minutes
). In cleaning
works
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too,
females
beats
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males, both in
participation
and in
the
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time
. When over 60% of
women
do
this
work, in
case
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the case
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of men, it is 20% less.
Similarly
, when an average of 70
minutes
is spent on
this
activity by
females
, only 50
minutes
are spent by men each day. In
case
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the case
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of pet care, both genders have very similar
participation
, and the
time
they
involve
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in
this
activity is almost equal (20% and 20
minutes
respectively).
However
, male
participation
is almost double
than
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that of
females
(around 10%) in house repairs and the duration they spend on it is almost thrice more than that of
females
(approximately 5
minutes
).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, time, participation, minutes, females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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