The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The data given presenting two different bar charts respectively inform the percentage of
males
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and
females
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in
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particular
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country who do chores (cooking, cleaning,
pet
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care, and house repairs) and the average
time
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women
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and
men
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in
minutes
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per day for each different
task
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.
Overall
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, both charts present the information that
women
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dominate the
task
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and
spending
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spend
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time
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for
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apply
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cooking and cleaning the house
while
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men
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are into
hourse
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house
horse
hours
repairs over
women
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.
Besides
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,
males
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and
females
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share the same amount of proportion and average
time
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for
pet
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caring. In regard to the percentage of housework,
females
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show domination over
males
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in cooking and cleaning at 80
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percent
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per cent
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, and 60
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percent
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per cent
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, respectively.
While
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the two
sharing
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share
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fair
task
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to
pet
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caring as 20
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percent
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per cent
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,
men
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spents
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spend
more proportion in
hourse
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house
hours
repairs over
women
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at 20
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percent
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per cent
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. Domination over
men
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to clean and cook by
women
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,
it
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apply
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automatically contributed more
time
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to those
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task
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tasks
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at roughly 85
minutes
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, and 65
minutes
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respectively.
Whereas
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men
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spending
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spent
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more
time
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in
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apply
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repairing
house
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the house
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at 20
minutes
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each day,
males
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and
females
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kept
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spent
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the same 20
minutes
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in
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apply
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a day
to do
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doing
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a
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apply
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pet
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care.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females, pet, time, women, men, minutes, task, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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