The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and

women of different employment status.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown

below.
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This
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bar
graph
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compare
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compares
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the amount of recreation
time
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for
two
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the two
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gender
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genders
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and with
divergent
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employment situation. The
graph
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illustrate
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illustrates
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five different engagement position including full and
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part
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part-time
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time
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work,
unemployment
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,
retired
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and housewife. All in
all
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all,
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it can be
deducted
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deduced
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that
men
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have had more delighted leisure
time
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in
compare
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comparison
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with
women
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. On the whole,
men
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with
full
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full-time
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time
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job
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jobs
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are not as pleased
as
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with
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their leisure
time
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in
compare
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comparison
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with
unemployment
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and retired
men
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and
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part
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part-time
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time
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women
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employments have had minimum pleasant from their spare
time
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. If we catch a glimpse
to in
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of
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this
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graph
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we will find out that, in terms of enjoyment from
unrestricted
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the unrestricted
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time
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between
men
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the
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unemployment
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unemployed
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and retired
men
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jointly come top of the list with an average
87
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of 87
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hours
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per week. Following that
men
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with nine to five
job
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jobs
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stand in
second
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the second
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step with about 45
hours
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in
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per
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week. Fascinatedly in
this
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graph
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part
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time
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part-time
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men
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employments
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employed
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have not had any recreational
time
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that it can cause by financial constraint route reason. By a glance at
this
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graph
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it can stand out that, corresponding with
men
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unemployment
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and retired
women
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jointly have had
most
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the most
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time
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for relaxing with 80
hours
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. Not
with standing
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withstanding
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house wife
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housewife
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are not as near as aforementioned groups with 45
hours
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for
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apply
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every
weeks
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week
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.
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Part
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Part-time
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time
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women
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in stark contrast with
men
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have had around 40
hours
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leisure
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of leisure
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time
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and
finally
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the
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apply
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full
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full-time
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time
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employment
women
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have
least
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the least
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spare
time
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among
women
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that
it
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which
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can derived from their engagements with
house hold
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household
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chores
beside
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besides
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whom
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apply
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work tasks .
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, time, part, unemployment, men, women, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure time
  • employment status
  • full-time
  • part-time
  • unemployed
  • retired
  • disparity
  • illustrates
  • depicts
  • comparison
  • significant
  • notable
  • approximately
  • contrast
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • analyze
  • evaluate
  • data
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