The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
This
bar Linking Words
graph
Use synonyms
compare
the amount of recreation Change the verb form
compares
time
for Use synonyms
two
Correct article usage
the two
gender
and with Change to a plural noun
genders
divergent
employment situation. The Add an article
the divergent
graph
Use synonyms
illustrate
five different engagement position including full and Change the verb form
illustrates
Use synonyms
part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
work, Use synonyms
unemployment
, Use synonyms
retired
and housewife. All in Replace the word
retirement
all
it can be Add a comma
all,
deducted
that Correct your spelling
deduced
men
have had more delighted leisure Use synonyms
time
in Use synonyms
compare
with Replace the word
comparison
women
. On the whole, Use synonyms
men
with Use synonyms
full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
Use synonyms
job
are not as pleased Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
as
their leisure Change preposition
with
time
in Use synonyms
compare
with Replace the word
comparison
unemployment
and retired Use synonyms
men
and Use synonyms
Use synonyms
part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
Use synonyms
women
employments have had minimum pleasant from their spare Use synonyms
time
.
If we catch a glimpse Use synonyms
to in
Change preposition
of
this
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graph
we will find out that, in terms of enjoyment from Use synonyms
unrestricted
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the unrestricted
time
between Use synonyms
men
the Use synonyms
Use synonyms
unemployment
and retired Replace the word
unemployed
men
jointly come top of the list with an average Use synonyms
87
Change preposition
of 87
hours
per week. Following that Use synonyms
men
with nine to five Use synonyms
job
stand in Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
second
step with about 45 Change the article
the second
hours
Use synonyms
in
week. Fascinatedly in Change preposition
per
this
Linking Words
graph
Use synonyms
part
Use synonyms
Use synonyms
time
Correct your spelling
part-time
men
Use synonyms
employments
have not had any recreational Correct your spelling
employed
time
that it can cause by financial constraint route reason.
By a glance at Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
Use synonyms
graph
it can stand out that, corresponding with Add a comma
graph,
men
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unemployment
and retired Use synonyms
women
jointly have had Use synonyms
most
Add an article
the most
time
for relaxing with 80 Use synonyms
hours
. Not Use synonyms
with standing
Correct your spelling
withstanding
house wife
are not as near as aforementioned groups with 45 Correct your spelling
housewife
hours
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for
every Change preposition
apply
weeks
. Change to a singular noun
week
Use synonyms
Part
Add a hyphen
Part-time
time
Use synonyms
women
in stark contrast with Use synonyms
men
have had around 40 Use synonyms
hours
Use synonyms
leisure
Change preposition
of leisure
time
and Use synonyms
finally
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the
Correct article usage
apply
full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
employment Use synonyms
women
have Use synonyms
least
spare Correct article usage
the least
time
among Use synonyms
women
that Use synonyms
it
can derived from their engagements with Correct pronoun usage
which
house hold
chores Correct your spelling
household
beside
Change preposition
besides
whom
work tasks .Correct pronoun usage
apply
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, time, part, unemployment, men, women, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 3 times.
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