The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts compare information about the percentage of a variety of activities spent time by adults
such
as working, relaxing at home, sleeping, travelling to
work
, going out, other interests or playing sports in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. As can be seen from the charts, it is obvious that most people tended to
work
in 1958 and 2008. In detail, the majority of adults chose to
work
with 33 per
cent
in 1958, and
then
the number of working increased to 42 per
cent
in 2008.
In contrast
, people who waste time sleeping decreased by 25
percent
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in 2008 from 1985 with 32 per
cent
.
Also
, there is a considerable decline in the number of going out from 19 per
cent
to just 6 per
cent
. If we look at other adults who have other interests or play sports, travel to
work
, and relax just slightly rise. In conclusion, apart from sleeping and going out, the number of others grew from 1958 to 2008.
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