Some people think traffic and housing problems in large cities can be solved by moving companies and factories and their employees to the countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.
Over the
last
two or three decades, migrating
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migration
is
increased from Verb problem
has
countryside
to metropolitan Add an article
the countryside
places
enormously to
around the world. Some claim that congestion and residential issues can be solved in cities with the enterprises and their employees might Change preposition
apply
move
to the village locations. I strongly agree with this
statement for the following reasons.
To begin
with, cities are suffered
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suffer
with
Change preposition
from
traffic
issues, especially the peak hours because the office-goers are occupied the
road to reach Change preposition
with the
office
on time. But when companies are moved to Correct article usage
the office
countryside
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the countryside
while
people do not stuck
with congestion and their route Change the verb form
stick
also
out of the city
in order to traffic
might be reduced. For instance
, a recent survey conducted by the Times of India said that clearly, India the state of Mumbai city
has reduced traffic
in city
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the city
cause that
many enterprises have Wrong verb form
causing
moved
to Wrong verb form
move
suburbs
areas Replace the word
suburban
along with
workers too because people want a comfortable and convenient lifestyle.
Furthermore
, the population's migration main reason for better
employment Add an article
a better
opportunity
with Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
higher
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a higher
salary
, Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
therefore
, they move
from their own land to urban
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an urban
place
, Fix the agreement mistake
places
as a result
, city
does not Add an article
the city
a city
fulfill
the needs of the residential Change the spelling
fulfil
places
. Companies move
to rural places
while
the population do
not Verb problem
is
interest
to Replace the word
interested
move
urban places
in order to
housing problems might be fixed. Change preposition
for
For example
, metropolitan locations have apartments and flats type of housing instead
of single house
. Fix the agreement mistake
houses
Therefore
, factories might shift to suburbs
areas Replace the word
suburban
that
Correct word choice
where
this
issue will be soved
tremendously.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
solved
saved
loved
traffic
and housing issue
might be fixed when companies Fix the agreement mistake
issues
may
shift their manufacturing units to rural venues, Verb problem
apply
therefore
public does not suffer these kinds of troubles. Hence
, I strongly agree with this
statement. I hope this
drives many benefits to the
society.Correct article usage
apply
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