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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for it own sake, regardless of wheather the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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think
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thinks
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 that
universities
 play a role
to give
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in giving
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 graduates
with
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apply
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the knowledge and
skills
 needed in the
workplace
, but others think
that is
 not the main functional
roles
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role
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 of
those institution
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that institution
those institutions
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. But I think that
universities
 must provide their alumni with knowledge and
skills
 needed in
workplace
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the workplace
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 too, because of
main
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the main
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 duties of
universities
, and to upgrade the accreditation of the
program
Firstly
,
Universities
 as
intitutions
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institutions
 have
crucial
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a crucial
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 function to train
the
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student
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students
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 to become ready in
workplace
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the workplace
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. Each
programs
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program
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 in
universities
 provide the
hardskill
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hard skill
hard skills
 that correlates with their major through lecture session. They
also
 should give opportunities for students to upgrade their additional
skills
such
 as teamwork, communication and collaboration through organization recruitment and volunteer
event
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events
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.
In addition
, all
universities
 in my country associate with
education
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the education
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 ministry to join
Merdeka
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the Merdeka
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 Belajar
program
, so that students can involve themselves
at
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in
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outbond
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outbound
 activities,
for
instance
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instance,
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internship
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internships
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, student exchange and study
independent
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independently
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 in several companies.
Secondly
, Involving the
skills
workplace
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in workplace
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 training in
university
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the university
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 is able to upgrade the accreditation of the
program
. Every
program
 in
university
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the university
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 has
their
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its
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 own indicator
at
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for
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 each course. Those
program
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programs
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 have to pass the
assesment
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assessment
 from
education
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the education
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 ministry.
By teaching
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Teaching
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 additional
skill
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skills
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 that potentially be useful in the
workplace
,
it
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apply
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can increase the value and credibility of the
program
, because
this
 is evaluated from
what
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apply
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the capabilities that have been taught in
those
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that program
those programs
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program
.
For instance
,
Mathematics
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the Mathematics
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education
program
in
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at
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University
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the University
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 of Jember passed the
assesment
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assessment
that
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apply
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held by
education
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the education
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 ministry every five years, and it gets
good
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a good
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 score of accreditation because
in
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apply
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every course always engage
workplace
 skill in
doing
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lecture session.
To sum up
,
Universities
 as higher
education
 institutions should give graduates with knowledge and
skills
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that
tthat
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apply
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required in
workplace
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the workplace
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 because it
was
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is
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main
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the main
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 function of the
universities
and
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apply
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to upgrade the
accrediation
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accreditation
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You should ensure the introduction clearly outlines your stance on the topic and the subsequent paragraphs provide detailed support for your opinion. Each paragraph must focus on a clear main idea, expanding on it with evidence or examples.
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