The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists to England who attended four different attractions in Brighton.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists to England who attended four different attractions in Brighton.
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The line graph displays the percentage of travellers to England, who attended four various attractions,
such
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as art galleries, pavilions, piers and festivals between 1980 and 2010
years
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. Substantially, the most well-liked attraction by tourists was pavilions for the biggest part of the given period.
In contrast
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, the least popular were piers for 25 out of 30
years
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. The festival category was the most visited in the first given year. It has a static graph throughout the whole term, which is approximately 30%.
On the contrary
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, the
pavilions
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line is unstable. At
first,
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in 1980
percentage
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the percentage
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was nearly 25%,
then
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there was a dramatic surge up to almost 50% in 1995. In the following
years
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, the proportion slightly decreased and ended up at 30% in 2010.
The attendance
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at art galleries was the most trendy among others in 1985, which was roughly 40%.
However
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, in the next two decades, the percentage markedly declined to less than 10%. The
last
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and the least favoured category is piers, which rarely exceeded 10%,
although
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in the
last
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5
years
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, it had steadily risen up to merely over 20%.
To sum up
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, all attractions changed their position at the top through the
years
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • tourists
  • attractions
  • trends
  • popularity
  • seasonal variations
  • attendance figures
  • locality
  • predicting
  • data analysis
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • decline
  • increment
  • steady
  • plummet
  • surge
  • stagnate
  • benchmark
  • correlate
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