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The figure below is a town planning map, showing the likely positions of two new shopping centres as well as the various different zones and major transportation routes of the town.

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The given urban planning map of the unknown
town
 depicts the locations of new shopping Centre A and Shopping Centre B
,
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while
 indicating the different zones and transportation routes. The
town
 is comprised of 4 different areas with the largest rural zone encompassing the other three different zones.
While
 the central
business
 hub is surrounded by the residential area, the industrial zones are scattered
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 the East and West sides of the suburbs.
At
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 the middle of the residential area, there is the central
business
 district,
forbiddening
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forbidding
forbidden
 any traffic.
As a consequence
, the three main roads - stretching from the top left
corner
, the top left
corner
 and the bottom right
corner
 of the
town
 - terminate outside of the
business
 hub. One exception is the railway which can penetrate the centre, bringing visitors from the South to the Northwest of the
town
.
Overall
, A is considered more convenient than B
due to
a
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better accessibility no matter
on
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the modes
transportation
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 and the choice of the location. As A will be situated at the middle point of the
business
 area, the three main roads
together with
 the railway are able to transport visitors from the outskirts of the city to the mall. Compared to A, B will be
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further
 apart at the top
left hand
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corner
 of the
town
, and between the railway and road.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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