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Your child is going on a three-day school trip to another country. The head teacher wants to find parents to go with the group and you would like to go. Write a letter to the head teacher. In your letter: • Say why you would like to go on the trip • Suggest what you could do to help during the trip • Ask other questions about the trip

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing an inquiry letter for an educational tour. Since my daughter had informed me about you were planning for children's
trip
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. She was elated to go to Australia.
Although
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, I was bewildered to give permission to my child to go abroad,
however
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, I decided to go on her school
trip
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. I will go with him because she cannot take care of
well
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herself well
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 and cannot cook meals for
three-day
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a three-day
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 tour. I would like to share my thoughts with you on how I can help you during
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 journey. I had been living for a couple of months with my parents
then
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 I moved to another country. I may guide all students through the historical city of Sydney. The Sydney Harbour is one of the one of the world's greatest arch bridges. The Sydney Opera House is an immense building for tourists and many people love to visit
this
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 place.
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, students will love these places
while
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 on
this
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 tour and acquire knowledge about history. I want to ask some queries regarding
this
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trip
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First,
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How much amount is required for
three-day
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a three-day
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trip
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?
Secondly
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, what are essential documents required?
Last
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 but not least, what are the arrival and departure times?
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 I can manage my important chores at home. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely,

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greeting and closing
Ensure you use an appropriate salutation and closing in a formal letter, such as 'Dear Head Teacher' and 'Yours faithfully,' followed by your full name.
logical structure
Organize your letter into clear paragraphs, each serving a distinct purpose: introduction and intention to join, how you can help, and questions about the trip.
single idea per paragraph
Keep each paragraph on topic. The history of the Sydney Harbour and Opera House is not directly relevant to how you can assist on the trip.
task achievement
Address all parts of the prompt with focused and expanded ideas: why you want to go (your child's needs and your own reasons), how you can assist (concrete proposals of help), and raise relevant questions (specific to the trip's organization, not just cost and documents).
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enthusiastic
  • Chaperone
  • Itinerary
  • Accommodations
  • Logistics
  • Overseeing
  • Cultural exchange
  • Assist
  • Supervise
  • Engage
  • Responsibilities
  • Bilingual
  • First aid certified
  • Emergency protocols
  • Team-building activities
  • Communication skills
  • Safety measures
  • Childcare experience
  • Transport arrangements
  • Educational objectives
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