The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists to England who attended four different attractions in Brighton.
The graph above shows the
percentage
of tourists with the purposes
of visiting four types of Brighton attractions in England. There are four types of attractions Fix the agreement mistake
purpose
show
Wrong verb form
shown
such
as Art Gallery, Pavilion, Pier and Festival. Those Correct quantifier usage
apply
of
Change preposition
apply
survey
Fix the agreement mistake
surveys
acquired
from 1980 to 2010 Add a missing verb
were acquired
with
showing the Change preposition
apply
fluctuative
value Correct your spelling
fluctuating
in
every Change preposition
of
attraction
.
In 1980, which
the first survey Correct word choice
when
held
, Add a missing verb
was held
Festival
Correct article usage
the Festival
has
the Wrong verb form
had
mosth
Correct your spelling
most
popularities
among the others. Festival Replace the word
popularity
attraction
Fix the agreement mistake
attractions
in
every 5 years Change preposition
apply
always
stagnant which means Add a missing verb
are always
this
attraction
does not have any significant changed
. Replace the word
changes
Beside
the Festival, Replace the word
Besides
Pier
Correct article usage
the Pier
attraction
percentage
show
Change the verb form
shows
the
increasing value despite in the 1990 was decreased. Art gallery Correct article usage
apply
attraction
, which has
the Wrong verb form
had
most
Correct word choice
highest
percentage
in 1985, the
popularity Correct article usage
apply
become
decreased until now (2010). The highest score Verb problem
has
of
Change preposition
apply
percentage
was reached in 1995 by Pavilion attraction
with Capitalize word
Attraction
the
value Correct article usage
a
almost
50 Change preposition
of almost
percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, attraction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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