You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words.
The graphs display the proportion of time to various activities by working adults in a specific country in both 1958 and 2008.
Overall
, people spent most of
the
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time
on
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working in 1958 and
this
is expected to
grown
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even more in the future. Working continued to be significant in 2008 with a sharp increase, but all others fell to minimal levels. In 1958, working had nearly a third of the
overall
share and
this
was set to increase to nearly
a
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half of the total in 2008. The next biggest activity was sleeping with nearly working, with only around a 1% drop. Going out was set to become the biggest loser with a loss of nearly 10%, from 19% to 8%. It was thought that sleeping would become the second
popular
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activity in 2008 with a drop of 32% to just 25%. Travel to work was projected to disappear with only 2% in 1958 but it
became
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to rise to 8%
the
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same level
with
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other interests or playing sports.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: The word "set" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • activities
  • working adults
  • summarise
  • report
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • time spent
  • work-related
  • leisure
  • personal care
  • travel
  • noticeable trends
  • over a period
  • devoted
  • significant changes
  • contrast
  • compare
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