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The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006

The tables below provide information about the consumption and production of potatoes in five parts of the world in 2006
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consumption
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 and
production
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 of
potatoes
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 in five different continents in 2006
Overall
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,
consumption
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potatoes
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of potatoes
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 (kg per person)
were
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was
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 high in
Europe
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,
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however
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however,
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 North
America
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 did not fall behind.
Production
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 of
potatoes
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 (in million
tons
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)
were
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was
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 above in 2 continents:
Europe
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 and
Asia
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. Consuming
potatoes
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were
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was
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 very low in Africa, Africa reached only 14.1. South and Central,
Asia
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was
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were
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 in similar degree it consisted
23.6
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of 23.6
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 and 25.8. But North
America
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not
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was not
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 close
their
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to their
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 results, North
America
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`s
consuming
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consumption
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 were 57.9
tons
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,
it
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which
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 is
bit
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a bit
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 less than
Europe
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 which
consuming
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consumption
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 were 96.1
tons
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.
On the other hand
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,
production
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 was not similar to
consumption
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.
Production
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 indicators were quite different because of
Europe
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 and
Asia
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,
Although
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 North
America
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 illustrated
good
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a good
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 number in
consumption
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,
otherwise
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 in terms of
production
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 it was 24.7
tons
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,
it
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which
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 was more than
south
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South
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 and Central
America
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that
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apply
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reached 15.6
tons
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also
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 more than Africa
too
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apply
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which
indicate
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indicates
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 16.4
tons
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. North
America
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 was
bit
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a bit
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 better than
other
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others
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 it was 24.7
tons
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.
Europe
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 and
Asia
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 demonstrated 126.3 and 131.2
that
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which
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 were the best numbers.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, production, potatoes, europe, america, tons, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural capacity
  • Dietary preferences
  • Cultural significance
  • Economic affordability
  • Trade policies
  • Food security
  • Production levels
  • Consumption patterns
  • Imbalance
  • Global agricultural trends
  • Technological advancements
  • Supply chain enhancements
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