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The chart details the length of different quality water in rivers in England, water quality of English rivers (in 1000s km) at 1993-2003

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The bar chart illustrates the
water
quality
 of rivers in England based on three categories Good, Fair and Poor between 1993 and 2003.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the
water
quality
 indicates significantly
good
Correct word choice
better
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quality
 than fair and poor conditions during the periods. Units are measured in 1000s km. In 1993, the
water
quality
 indicated around the same portion for good and fair
quality
, at approximately 12 to 12,5. The good condition of
water
quality
 surpasses rapidly to 18,5,
while
 the fair
quality
 of
water
 remains at 12.
This
 situation changed gradually over the years, but good
quality
 still takes the majority of river length than fair condition.
At the end
 of the period, the good
quality
 length decreased by 21 and the fair
quality
 by 9. Poor
quality
 length of the English River was the lowest over the periods. Starting from the beginning periods at 9,5 points
then
 dipping to a low of 3,5 in 1994. Less change was seen in the remaining years, until the end of the period by 4.
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