You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 

The line chart below shows the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The line graph depicts the changes of 4 reasons for why
people
moved to the capital city of a country in a
15
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15-year
years
period from 2000 to 2015. The
overall
trend for the period is
of
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an increase in the numbers moving away to the city.
Overall
, the left bar of the graph shows the number of
people
,
while
the bar below represents the time. In general, employment was the main reason. But
study
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the study
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is the reason that increased the most. The
last
2 reasons
of moved
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for moving
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because
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were because
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of family/
friend
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friends
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and
moved
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for adventure didn’t
changed
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much over
years
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the years
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. First of all, employment cause started at nearly 60
thousands
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thousand
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in 2000, reached
it’s
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its
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highest peak at 92
thousands
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thousand
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in 2010, but
then
went down
for
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to
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5,000 in the next 5
years
.
Secondly
,
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the moved
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moved
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move
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for study
beginned
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beginning
beginner
at 25
thousands
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thousand
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in 2000, it rose
up
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strongly over the first 5
year
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years
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, slowed down a bit in the middle phase,
then
continue
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continued
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to
went
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up dramatically for 30
thousands
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thousand
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people
from 2010 to 2015.
Thirdly
, moved because of family/ friends
beginned
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beginning
at 10
thousands
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thousand
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, it increased gradually and
then
stopped at 22
thousands
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thousand
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at
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2010, after that it moved up stable for nearly only 1 thousand
people
in the
last
5
years
phase. Moved to capital cities because of adventure was the least in
this
graph, which grew
stabily
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steadily
stability
for 5
thousands
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thousand
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over 15
years
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, overall".
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years, thousands with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.

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