You visit a cafe every day. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In your letter say what you like about the cafe suggest an improvement to the cafe explain the benefits of your suggestion.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
to suggest a small
upgradation
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upgrade
in your cafeteria. I am Jaskaran Singh Awal, resident of Leela Bhawan. I visit your cafe every evening after my office
hour
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to have a cup of coffee with my colleague and I always admire the food and decoration of your cafeteria, especially the roof lights as they are mesmerizing to
eyes
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the eyes
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.
Although
I adore the sitting area,
yet
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I never liked the kitchen as it is not clean and food is prepared under unhygienic conditions. To inform you about it, I gave a suggestion to the waiter, but no action
had
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has
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been taken until now.
Apart from
this
, you
does
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not play music as it can
also
create a positive environment. I would really appreciate
,
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if
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it if
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you would try to keep the kitchen tidy and prepare food under hygienic conditions as it can
also
increase the footfall of your cafe.
Moreover
, some of my office colleagues
also
want to visit your restaurant but they hesitate
due to
the untidy kitchen and lack of music. Hoping for a positive action. Yours Faithfully, Jaskaran Singh Awal
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greeting and closing
Ensure you begin with a polite greeting and end with an appropriate closing to adhere to letter-writing conventions.
logical structure
Develop a clearer logical structure within your letter by organizing content into distinct paragraphs with each paragraph addressing a specific aspect of the task.
complete response
Aim to fully respond to the task by expanding more on the benefits of the suggested improvement, providing specific examples or potential outcomes.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a consistent and respectful tone throughout the letter appropriate for the intended recipient.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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