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Nowadays, more people would rather purchase food than cook at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Food
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 is one of the most essential things humans work for. Modernization has changed
human’s
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 lifestyles and nowadays many people prefer to order
food
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 rather than cook themselves.
Ready to eat
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 meals is more saving people’s time , especially in societies with modern-busy lifestyles. On
one
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the one
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 hand, buying meals as
choice
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the choice
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has
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benefical
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beneficial
 for people with busy
schedule
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schedules
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. Our modern life has provided great technology to make purchasing
food
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more
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easier.
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 that choosing online saves our time and energy. As an example we don’t have to spend more time
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preparing
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to prepare
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 things
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for
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 cook and waste energy on cooking.
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Moreover
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 online
food
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 offers various types of
food
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 choices.
For Instance
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, there are Online
Food
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 Apps that give customers the freedom and choice to place an order
at
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virtually anytime and anywhere.
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 buying
food
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 from micro-enterprises
,
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 indirectly helps small
business
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businesses
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.
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, readymade or junk
food
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also
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 worthless considering it is lacks
of
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nutrition compared with
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home-cooked
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. There are a lot of unhygienic practices in the
food
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 industry which are unhealthier and cause several diseases.
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Additionally
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food
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 packaging impacts the environment. Most
of
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food
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pack
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packs
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 are created from plastic, which harms marine life. Another special consideration in
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that
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is that
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 buying
food
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 from outside costs more. Because indirectly, apart from paying for
food
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, we
also
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 pay for cooking services. In conclusion,
this
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 essay acknowledges that home-cooked meals are healthier than
food
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 from restaurants,
however
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 fast
food
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 is more efficient and work-saving. As an employee who loves to buy
food
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 rather than cook. I suggest restaurant change their plastic packaging to make eco eco-friendly
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 as recycled cardboard and paper to reduce the environmental damage.
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 to handle the expensive price issues, today
lot
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 of
food
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 companies give many deals and promos.
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Task Response
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience food
  • Time-efficient
  • Culinary skills
  • Dietary habits
  • Takeout culture
  • Meal prep
  • Fast food
  • Home-cooked meal
  • Nutritional value
  • Consumerism
  • Family dynamics
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Ready-made meals
  • Eating out
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