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The bar chart bar gives information about shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan.

The bar chart bar gives information about shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan.
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The bar chart illustrates data about the main spending of five developed
countries
 for the five various consumer goods
such
 as food, housing, transportation, health care and clothing. Units are measured
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percentage
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.
Overall
, the spending amount of money on housing for all
countries
 accounts
the
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for the
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 most popular spending on consumer goods, except for Japan.
In addition
 to
this
, both
of
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the
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health care and clothing experience below
of
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average spending, approximately 5-7%. On the one hand, the
expenditure
 on housing for
USA
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the USA
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 population is much higher than another 4
countries
while
 Japan people spending accounts
a
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for a
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reamrkable
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reasonable
 amount for both
of
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food and housing, 23% and 22%, respectively. Interestingly, transportation
expenditure
 is the third highest figure for the
countries
 except for
US
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the US
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 in which it accounts
15
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for 15
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% of total transportation spending for the English. On the
another
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other
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 hand, the health care and clothing expenses
is
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are
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 the unpopular part of the whole shares of
expenditure
 for selected categories for 5
countries
. Following
to
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this
,
on
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the
healtcare
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healthcare
 spending of
USA
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the USA
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 is about 3% higher than the
closthing
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clothing
closing
expenditure
. By the way, Canada and UK spending on
the
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clothing is the above of 5% of total shares of
expenditure
 for selected consumer goods, 6 % and 7 % ,respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, expenditure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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