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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The pie charts illustrate the number of four different kinds of
vehicle
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vehicles
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 used in the United Kingdom in three different years with the twenty years interval, starting from 1965. The charts are given in
percentage
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percentages
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.
Overall
, it can be seen from the charts that private cars were
majority
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the majority
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 for all three years,
while
 recreational
vehicals
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vehicles
 were
minority
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a minority
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. The quantity of usage of private cars seemed
increased
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to increase
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 steadily
along
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over
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60-year
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a 60-year
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 period, starting from 40.0% in 1965,
reached
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reaching
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 55.0% in 1985, and
finally
reached
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reaching
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 60.0% in 2005.
On the contrary
, other types of
vehicle
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vehicles
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 decreased
comparing
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apply
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between 2005 and 1965. Usage of recreational vehicles and public transport were in the same trend. They slightly
drop
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dropped
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 between 1965 and 1985, which was 15.0% to 8% for recreational
vehicle
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vehicles
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 and 25% to 20% for public transport. After that, they minimally rose to 8.0% and 22.0% respectively. Lorries were different when
compare
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compared
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 to
other
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others
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, they maintained 20% from 1965 to 1985,
then
 significantly fell to 10% in 2005.
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