You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The illustration demonstrates how carbonated drinks are made.
Overall
, it is a 5 stage, man-made, linear process. It begins with raw Linking Words
water
being cleaned and Use synonyms
finally
results in drinks being delivered.
First of all, in factories, raw Linking Words
water
goes through a long tube to filter and Use synonyms
water
softener, where the percolated agua mixes with chemicals. After that, the accelerated through pump flow is heated in an electrical heater machine, the boiling steam Use synonyms
are
cooled through the cooling pipe and Change the verb form
is
then
goes to a tank which has carbon dioxide inside.
Following that, carbonated Linking Words
water
goes into a mixing tank which is connected to its colouring, syrup and flavour. Use synonyms
Subsequently
, Linking Words
this
brew filters a second time. From Linking Words
this
, the liquid is bottled and canned, the almost finished product is labelled and put into boxes in factories. Linking Words
Finally
, the product is delivered to the supermarket and sold to the users.Linking Words
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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