The chart below shows figures for attendances at hospital emergency care departments in Northern Ireland by age group in December 2016 and 2017.
The bar graph gives information about the patient attendances of the
emaergency
care departments of a hospital which is situated in Northern Ireland in the month of December Correct your spelling
emergency
in
2016 and 2017. The amount is Change preposition
apply
mesured
in Correct your spelling
measured
number
.
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numbers
Overall
. it is evident that,
very young and very old people's admission in the hospital is high.Remove the comma
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However
, age
group Correct article usage
the age
from5-15
patients admission is quite low.And in 2017 Correct your spelling
from 5-15
the
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patients
attendance Change to a genitive case
patient's
patients'
was
increased in all Unnecessary verb
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the
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age
groups in comparing
to Replace the word
comparison
2016
In Correct article usage
the 2016
december
2016, the number of Change the capitalization
December
age
group 75 &over was 62000 while
it increased in 2017(64000). The number of patient attendance of
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in
age
Correct article usage
the age
group
45-64 and 65-74 are almost the same.Fix the agreement mistake
groups
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