the pie graphs below show the result of a survey of the children's activities. the first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities that girls participate.
The two pie charts illustrate the proportions of what kinds of
activities
children mostly do. The first chart shows the activities
of boys
while
the second chart shows that of girls
.
Overall
, both boys
and girls
are less likely to participate in listening to music. Furthermore
, the boys
are most likely spending their time playing computer games, meanwhile, the girls
prefer dancing as the most favourite activity.
In terms of cultural and leisure activities
, neither boys
nor girls
are rarely listening to music, only 10% of them like listening to music. On the other hand
, 26% of boys
choose basketball as their favourite activity in their leisure days, whereas
most of the girls
tend to do dancing in their leisure days (27%).
With regards to the remaining activities
, 21% of girls
spend their time reading some books although
boys
only have a 2% proportion in reading among all the activities
. Additionally
, the proportion of girls
at just 16% playing computer games is just above half of the percentage of boys
playing computer games 34%.Submitted by ru.kabiru.biru on
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