the pie graphs below show the result of a survey of the children's activities. the first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities that girls participate.

the pie graphs below show the result of a survey of the children's activities. the first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities that girls participate.
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The two pie charts illustrate the proportions of what kinds of
activities
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children mostly do. The first chart shows the
activities
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of
boys
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while
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the second chart shows that of
girls
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.
Overall
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, both
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and
girls
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are less likely to participate in listening to music.
Furthermore
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, the
boys
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are most likely spending their time playing computer games, meanwhile, the
girls
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prefer dancing as the most favourite activity. In terms of cultural and leisure
activities
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, neither
boys
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nor
girls
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are rarely listening to music, only 10% of them like listening to music.
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, 26% of
boys
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choose basketball as their favourite activity in their leisure days,
whereas
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most of the
girls
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tend to do dancing in their leisure days (27%). With regards to the remaining
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, 21% of
girls
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spend their time reading some books
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boys
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only have a 2% proportion in reading among all the
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.
Additionally
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, the proportion of
girls
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at just 16% playing computer games is just above half of the percentage of
boys
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playing computer games 34%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words activities, boys, girls with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • cultural activities
  • leisure activities
  • participate
  • percentage
  • gender difference
  • similar participation rates
  • traditional gender roles
  • trends
  • impact
  • parental influence
  • extracurricular activities
  • accessible
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