the pie graphs below show the result of a survey of the children's activities. the first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities that girls participate.

the pie graphs below show the result of a survey of the children's activities. the first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities that girls participate.
The two pie charts illustrate the proportions of what kinds of
activities
children mostly do. The first chart shows the
activities
of
boys
while
the second chart shows that of
girls
.
Overall
, both
boys
and
girls
are less likely to participate in listening to music.
Furthermore
, the
boys
are most likely spending their time playing computer games, meanwhile, the
girls
prefer dancing as the most favourite activity. In terms of cultural and leisure
activities
, neither
boys
nor
girls
are rarely listening to music, only 10% of them like listening to music.
On the other hand
, 26% of
boys
choose basketball as their favourite activity in their leisure days,
whereas
most of the
girls
tend to do dancing in their leisure days (27%). With regards to the remaining
activities
, 21% of
girls
spend their time reading some books
although
boys
only have a 2% proportion in reading among all the
activities
.
Additionally
, the proportion of
girls
at just 16% playing computer games is just above half of the percentage of
boys
playing computer games 34%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • cultural activities
  • leisure activities
  • participate
  • percentage
  • gender difference
  • similar participation rates
  • traditional gender roles
  • trends
  • impact
  • parental influence
  • extracurricular activities
  • accessible
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