The charts below show the percentages of male and female students getting top grades in 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of male and female students getting top

grades in 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the

main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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about the percentage of girls and booys who got
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in two
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it can be seen that men were more smarter than
women
in humanities and
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however
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at languages and arts more than
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such
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women
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women
in 2000 by around %45 per cent ,
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in 1960 about %20 percentage were getting top ,
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that students could get good grade on in
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that in 1960 was about %32
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man
got top but
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percentage was decline in 2000 to slightly to %15 ,
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approximately
below %30 which
women
were worth at math and
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they got just below %5 refers to
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achievement in Languages more than
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by more than %40 for
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the same
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, even though
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to %30 in 2000, as we see art
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big fan of it that was why they have gotten top more tan
man
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, science, man, subject with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentages
  • top grades
  • achievement
  • gender disparity
  • educational trends
  • academic performance
  • comparison
  • decade
  • educational policy
  • societal expectations
  • improvement
  • educational attainment
  • graduates
  • academic excellence
  • statistics
  • educational landscape
  • benchmark
  • parity
  • gender roles
  • historical data
  • performance indicators
  • educational improvements
  • longitudinal study
  • scholastic achievement
  • gender gap
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