The bar chart below shows the top ten counties for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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illustrates

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ten nations
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produced and consumed
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electric

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energy in 2014.
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,the generation of electricity is more than
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of it and the highest numbers
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to China. In 2014, China generated 5398 billion kWh
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and used 5322 of them,which was the highest in two sectors, namely
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of electricity and usage of it. The United States goes to the second place , with values of 4099 and 3866.Russia, Japan and India's electricity levels were almost
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the same levels, but the least consumer country was
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. Other countries like France, Brazil
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Germany and Korea generated less than 620kwh
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. Korea Republic generated the least amount of
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electricity

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of 485.1 and consumed 449.5.
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