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The bar chart below shows the top ten counties for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten counties for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart
illustartes
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illustrates
top
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the top
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 ten nations
who
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that
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 produced and consumed
electer
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electric
 energy in 2014.
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,the generation of electricity is more than
consumption
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the consumption
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 of it and the highest numbers
belongs
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 to China. In 2014, China generated 5398 billion kWh
energy
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of energy
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 and used 5322 of them,which was the highest in two sectors, namely
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manifacture
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manufacture
 of electricity and usage of it. The United States goes to the second place , with values of 4099 and 3866.Russia, Japan and India's electricity levels were almost
on
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at
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 the same levels, but the least consumer country was
india
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India
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. Other countries like France, Brazil
and
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apply
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Germany and Korea generated less than 620kwh
energy
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of energy
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. Korea Republic generated the least amount of
electricy
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electricity
with
figure
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the figure
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 of 485.1 and consumed 449.5.

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