Two charts below show the percentage of qualified graduates in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Two charts below show the percentage of qualified graduates in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie
chats
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illustrates
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illustrate
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the distribution of academic
degree
graduates
in 1980 and 2008. The
degree
measured
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in
percent
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per cent
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and divided into six
type
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, there are
PhD
Science
, Masters
Science
,
First
Degree
Arts
, Masters
Arts
,
PhD
Arts
and
First
Degree
Arts
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that in 1980 the majority of
graduates
were from
science
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a science
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background,
such
as
PhD
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a PhD
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of
Science
,
Master
of Sciences and
First
degree
of Sciences.
This
proportion
were
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unchanged until 2008,
where
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when
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the
graduates
from
science
still
have
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had
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the biggest percentage in total. In 1980, 61% of
student
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students
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were from
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a sciences
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sciences
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science
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background
graduates
, with
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a Master
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Master
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degree
as the highest,
First
degree
and
PhD
following. Meanwhile, the rest of
percentage
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the percentage
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were from a quarter of
First
Degree
Arts
, 12% were
Master
of
Arts
and a mere of
PhD
of
Arts
. In 2008, the
science
degree
were
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was
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still the biggest part,
however
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however,
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some shift
occured
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occurred
. The percentage of
PhD
Science
experienced
a
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significant growth to 30%,
whereas
first
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first-degree
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degree
science
shrinked
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shrank
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to only a tenth.
This
trend
also
happened in
Arts
major
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majors
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,
PhD
of
Arts
increased slightly
for
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by
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5% and
first
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first-degree
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degree
art
drop
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dropped
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to 11%.
Lastly
, the
Master
of
Arts
and
Master
of
Science
remained unchanged.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words degree, graduates, phd, science, first, arts, master with synonyms.
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