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The bar chart shows expectations for change of European young people in the next 20 years in five different areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows expectations for change of European young people in the next 20 years in five different areas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates forecasts about the change of
European
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the European
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 young generation in the next two decades in five sectors.
Overall
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, the majority of sectors will get worse except people's
communcation
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communication
 and the worst deterioration is expected from air
quality
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. In the next 20 years, communication among people will get better
for
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at
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 above 60%, which is expected to be the most improved sector,
whereas
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 air
quality
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 forecasts show that
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quality
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the quality
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 of the air will get better only over 20% and
other
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the other
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 80% will get worse. Health and Water
quality
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 areas are expecting almost the same results each, improving
for
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by
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 above 40% and 40%, respectively.Expectations from food
quality
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 are equal on each side,
the
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apply
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half of it will get better and the other half
expected
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is expected
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 to
be deteriorated
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deteriorate
have deteriorated
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words quality with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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