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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The following table and graph give information about the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) and employment sectors of a developing country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The following table and graph give information about the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) and employment sectors of a developing country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words
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The table compares the distribution of
employment
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 and
GDP
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 in 1992,
whereas
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 the line graph represents the percentage of
GDP
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 in different years.
Overall
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,
GDP
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 from servicers was always higher compared to other categories. Though there was a downward trend in the
GDP
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 of
Services
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 and Natural
resources
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, the trend of the
GDP
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 of
Industry
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 followed an upward trend. The Highest
GDP
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 came from
services
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, especially from the hotel business at 37.4% and the lowest came from
industry
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, which figure is 15.4%.
On the other hand
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,
although
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 the
GDP
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 was the lowest in natural
resources
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,
employment
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 was the highest in
this
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 category. Its contribution to
GDP
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 was 19.2%, but
employment
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 was 77.4%. The ratio of
employment
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 vs
GDP
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 was almost the same in the cases of
industry
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 and government service. In 1986, the percentage of GDPs was 65% in
services
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, and 25% in natural
resources
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, but only 10% in
industry
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. Even though the
industry
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 started with the lowest
GDP
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, it crossed the natural
resources
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 after 1994 and doubled in 1995.
Services
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 and natural
resources
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 finished with the percentages of 55% and 18% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, gdp, services, resources, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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