The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990. Summarise the information, by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990. Summarise the information, by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
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The bar chart gives information about the proportion of how much four distinct sectors (industry,
self employment
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self-employment
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, service sector, and agriculture) were contributed in
economy
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the economy
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of India in three years, 1950, 1970, and 1990. At a glance, it is noticeable that
industry
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the industry
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sector experienced a fall in the given periods with the exception of the other three fields. In terms of the striking fields, the number of people
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applied to
self employment
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self-employment
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was about 6% in the initial year, which grew considerably in the next 40 years and reached a peak at around 36% in the
last
year. Contrariwise, the ratio of service industry and agriculture workers stood at approximately 26% and 35%, respectively, in
first
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period. Subsequent to that, the former witnessed a slight drop in
following
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20 years, but suddenly plummeted to under 10% whilst the latter
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significantly by about 13%
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and then
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stopped
at
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in
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1990.
In addition
, the fragment of people who work in Indian industries fluctuated in the given periods.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sectoral contribution
  • economic base
  • industrialization
  • service-oriented economy
  • diversified economy
  • agriculture sector
  • industrial sector
  • services sector
  • economic policy
  • dominant sector
  • fluctuation
  • transition
  • shift
  • steady increase
  • decreasing trend
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