Two charts below show the percentage of qualified graduates in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Two charts below show the percentage of qualified graduates in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagrams illustrate the changes
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the proportion of five types of qualified graduates in a certain nation in 1980 and 2008. These graduates included students who studied
first
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degrees
,
master
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degrees
and
PhD
degrees
. It is evident that more students pursued higher education for
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degrees
and
PhD
degrees
than
first
degrees
after 20 years. The ratio of
PhD
science witnessed the biggest increase from 13% in 1980 to 30% in 2008, followed by
PhD
Arts with
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5% increment. Meanwhile, Masters Arts showed a
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marginal
rise
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1 % in 2008. In stark contrast, there was a significant decline
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the data
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first degree
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Arts, dropping from 25% of qualified graduates in 1980 to 11% in 2008.
Similarly
, the ratio for
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science
also
experienced a dramatic decrease, which
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to 10% in 2008 from 19% in 1980. Regardless
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changes, the shares for masters’ science remained unchanged at 29% in these two years.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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