the pie graphs below show the result of a survey of the children's activities. the first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities that girls participate.

the pie graphs below show the result of a survey of the children's activities. the first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities that girls participate.
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The bar graph illustrates data regarding the survey of a fraction of
boys
and
girls
engaged in culture and leisure activities.
Overall
, it can be seen that most
boys
(34%) opted to play video games as their leisure activity, which is double that of
boys
who engaged in soccer.
Whereas
, most
girls
chose dancing as their leisure activity. Contrary to that, the least amount of
girls
showed any interest in listening to music, and
boys
did not prefer to read, which was only 2% of the reading fraction.
However
, 21% of a significant amount of
girls
show
interesting
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in reading. It is interesting to notice that both 10% of
boys
and
girls
participated in to listening music. 11% of
girls
engaged in gymnastics,
similarly
, 11% of
boys
took part in skateboarding. 26% of
boys
engaged in playing basketball, and 27% of
girls
enjoyed dancing. Meanwhile,
girls
who enjoyed netball were 1 % under
girls
engaged in playing computer games, which were 15% and 16% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • cultural activities
  • leisure activities
  • participate
  • percentage
  • gender difference
  • similar participation rates
  • traditional gender roles
  • trends
  • impact
  • parental influence
  • extracurricular activities
  • accessible
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