The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.

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The bar charts illustrates

that

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two genres of

programmes

such

game

shows and

relaity

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reality

shows watched by male and female in four categories of the

age

group people in Australia.

Overall

female

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females

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was

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had

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the highest rate of

watch

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watching

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the

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reality

shows on

whereas

male

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males

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watched more hours of

the

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game

shies.

According to

the bar chart shows that women was the highest watching hours of

the

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reality

shows

rather

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than men which was 70% and around 38% respectively.

In contrast

, there is a slight difference between men and women

watched

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who watched

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game

shows on

which was 60% and around 61%.

In addition

, above 45

age

people were the highest watched of both the

shows as compared to other

age

groups which was almost 70%.

Age

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group of 16-24 folks had

watch

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equally which was around 50 per cent. Between

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the 25

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to 34

age

group

was

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watched more

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reality

shows than

game

shows which was 60 and 40 per cent respectively.

Similarly

, 35-44

age

people watched more

the

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reality

shows than

game

shows which was 70% and 50% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, game, age, reality with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 11 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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