The charts give information about two genres of TV programmes watched by men and women and four different age groups in Australia.

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The bar charts illustrates

that

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two genres of

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programmes

such

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game

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shows and

relaity

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reality

shows watched by male and female in four categories of the

age

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group people in Australia.

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female

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females

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was

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the highest rate of

watch

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watching

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the

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reality

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shows on

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whereas

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male

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males

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watched more hours of

the

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game

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shies.

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the bar chart shows that women was the highest watching hours of

the

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reality

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shows

rather

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than men which was 70% and around 38% respectively.

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, there is a slight difference between men and women

watched

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who watched

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game

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shows on

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which was 60% and around 61%.

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, above 45

age

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people were the highest watched of both the

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shows as compared to other

age

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groups which was almost 70%.

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Age

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group of 16-24 folks had

watch

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equally which was around 50 per cent. Between

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the 25

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to 34

age

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group

was

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watched more

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reality

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shows than

game

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shows which was 60 and 40 per cent respectively.

Similarly

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, 35-44

age

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people watched more

the

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reality

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shows than

game

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shows which was 70% and 50% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, game, age, reality with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 11 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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7
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

183 words

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