Write a letter to your manager to request setting up a cafeteria for the staff In your letter, you should tell: •what you heard about the inconvenience from the staffs •how you feel about it •what suggestion you can give
Dear Mr. Jhon,
I am writing
this
letter to request you to setting
up a canteen for the employees inside the company premises. Change the verb form
set
This
will help our staff to improve their productivity. In fact, I have received feedback from different employers, where all of them describes
the challenges, they are facing in the absence of Correct subject-verb agreement
describe
restaurant
in the company.
Correct article usage
a restaurant
Firstly
, several staffs
, those who are having their lunch outside, Fix the agreement mistake
staff
complains
that they are losing their time to get lunch outside Change the verb form
complain
hotel
. Add an article
the hotel
Moreover
, hotel food is costly and unhealthy. Secondly
, if they get bored in the work environment, the cafeteria is necessary to get some refreshments and hence
to stimulate their brain. This
in turns
Correct subject-verb agreement
turn
associate
the productivity. Other than the aforementioned staff feedback, another key point is constructing Wrong verb form
associated
canteen
in the company creates Correct article usage
a canteen
win-win
situation. Add an article
a win-win
According to
me
there could be Add a comma
me,
Correct article usage
a full
full time
running cafeteria Add a hyphen
full-time
along with
some vending machine
would be a nice option.
I look forward to your prompt action Fix the agreement mistake
machines
to
Change preposition
on
this
matter.
Yours Sincerely,
AnilSubmitted by unnikrishnanpp153 on
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greeting and closing
Ensure that the opening and closing of the letter are appropriately formal and in line with the context of writing to your manager. Consider using 'Dear Mr. John,' with the correct spelling of the name, and a more formal sign-off such as 'Kind regards' or 'Yours faithfully'.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the request could be more polite and formal, considering the recipient is your manager. Instead of directly stating 'I am writing this letter to request you to setting up a canteen for the employees,' consider a softer approach such as 'I would like to propose the consideration of establishing a cafeteria for the staff.'
single idea per paragraph
Make sure that each paragraph presents a single, clear idea to maintain coherence. While the letter does touch upon different aspects related to the cafeteria, the ideas could be better organized and more clearly separated into individual paragraphs.
complete response
logical structure
While the structure of the letter is generally logical, it would benefit from more clear transitions between points. Additionally, the letter should be checked for errors in word choice, grammar, and spelling, such as 'restaurant' instead of 'canteen,' and 'employers' instead of 'employees'. This would improve the overall cohesion and logical flow of the writing.