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The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram
provide
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 the processing of
life
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the life
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 cycle of the silkworm by four steps
according to
 periods.
However
,
the
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apply
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how
produce
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to produce
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 the
silk
 cloth
Overall
, the cycle of the silkworm has
completed
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been completed
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 by four main stages. Starting the cycle
by
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with
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 eggs.
Then
 grow
up
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apply
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during separate
period
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periods
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 of formation different
shape
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shapes
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 called mulberry leaf and other
silk
thread
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threads
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 which
similar
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are similar
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 to the next called cocoon before
complete it
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completing
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 as
moth
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a moth
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.
Otherwise
, the stages of production of
silk
 cloth are boll, unwind, twist,
weave
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and weave
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. As you see, after present eggs
it has
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are
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 converted and produce the food,called mulberry leaf with double
of
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apply
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silkworm larva protrusion,which
take
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takes
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 10 days. During 4-6 weeks it
become
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becomes
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pair
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a pair
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 of
silk
 thread with small tile (larva),yet
3
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in 3
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-8 days both of them are fusion as small oval (cocoon).
On
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In
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 the final sixteen days
moth
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month
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 is
complete
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completely
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 developed.
Moreover
, when we
boiling
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boiled
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 the
clothon
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cloth on
cloth
 water the diameter of
thread
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the thread
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 extended to 900 m,
lastly
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and lastly
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, twist and wave stain by the dye.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words silk with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Silkworm (Bombyx mori)
  • Sericulture
  • Egg
  • Larva/larvae
  • Cocoon
  • Moth
  • Mulberry leaves
  • Pupa/pupae
  • Spinning
  • Weaving
  • Dyeing
  • Silk threads
  • Silk cloth
  • Life cycle
  • Metamorphosis
  • Harvesting
  • Domestication
  • Natural fibers
  • Textile industry
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