The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
This
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These
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bar charts
illusrated
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illustrated
illustrate
the
of
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apply
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percentages of countries that
british
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British
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emigrate
such
as; Australia, spain, New Zealand,
United
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the United
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State
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States
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and France
in
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from
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2004 to 2007.
Overall
, the
maine
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main
Maine
countries were
britain
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Britain
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has selected
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,
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Australia and Spain in the whole period,
in
contrast
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contrast,
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the other three
were
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had
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less
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smaller
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peoplation
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populations
. As you see, more than 40 thousand live in Australia, particularly, in 2006 the significant population was just over 50,000 and in 2005 was just below 40,000.
The second
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, Spain in the first couple of years
were
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was
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approximately at the same level by 35thousands,
however
, next decreased by
minor
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a minor
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33 thousand but in the
last
year was less than 30 thousand. In New
Zealand
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Zealand,
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the population had similar percentages throughout the period
were
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apply
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between 23 and 20
thousands
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thousand
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. As similar
as
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to
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the USA in both years 2004 and 2006 but in 2007 were
simillar
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similar
number
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numbers
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. The most people
live
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living
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in
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France
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france
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France
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in 2005 was about 33 in 2004 was about 22
while
in 2006 was 26 but
2007
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in 2007
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was 17
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