The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
bar charts Correct determiner usage
These
illusrated
the Correct your spelling
illustrated
illustrate
of
percentages of countries that Change preposition
apply
british
emigrate Change the capitalization
British
such
as; Australia, spain, New Zealand, United
Correct article usage
the United
State
and France Fix the agreement mistake
States
in
2004 to 2007.
Change preposition
from
Overall
, the maine
countries were Correct your spelling
main
Maine
britain
Change the capitalization
Britain
has selected
Australia and Spain in the whole period, Wrong verb form
,
in
contrast
the other three Add the comma(s)
contrast,
were
Verb problem
had
less
Correct word choice
smaller
peoplation
.
As you see, more than 40 thousand live in Australia, particularly, in 2006 the significant population was just over 50,000 and in 2005 was just below 40,000.
Correct your spelling
populations
The second
, Spain in the first couple of years Correct article usage
Second
were
approximately at the same level by 35thousands, Correct subject-verb agreement
was
however
, next decreased by minor
33 thousand but in the Correct article usage
a minor
last
year was less than 30 thousand.
In New Zealand
the population had similar percentages throughout the period Add a comma
Zealand,
were
between 23 and 20 Unnecessary verb
apply
thousands
. As similar Change to singular
thousand
as
the USA in both years 2004 and 2006 but in 2007 were Change preposition
to
simillar
Correct your spelling
similar
number
.
The most people Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
live
in Wrong verb form
living
Change the capitalization
France
france
in 2005 was about 33 in 2004 was about 22 Change the capitalization
France
while
in 2006 was 26 but 2007
was 17Change preposition
in 2007
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