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The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The map below shows the development of the town of Stromer between 1995 and now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The maps
illustrates
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 the construction of the city of Stromer between 1995 and the present day.
Overall
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, the
town
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 went through drastic changes and there were made
a lots
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a lot
lots
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 of facilities for citizens to make their life better. In 1995,
the
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a
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 big part of the
town
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were
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was
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 forest and farmland and only shops.In
north
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the north
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 area of the
town
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 was constructed
airport
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an airport
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 and on the left side of
this
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 were built two apartments
,
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and two-thirds of the forest has been cleared.
Furthermore
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, in the
center
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centre
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 of the
town
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 was built
new
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a new
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 school and the number of shops
was
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apply
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increased and they
sourround
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surround
surrounded
 the school. Another important change is
area
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an area
the area
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 of farmland is reduced in size and now it's only occupying only a quarter of its original expanse.
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, houses in the past were located in the north of the city , but now all houses can be found in east south of the Stromer.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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