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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the
proportion
 of
water
 used in three categories plant, agricultural and household in six different world
area
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areas
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.
Overall
, it can be seen that
developing
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the developing
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area
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areas
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 used
the
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water
 the
highest
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most
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 in
the
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agricultural,
while
developed
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the developed
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area
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areas
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 used
water
in
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for
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 the
plant
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plants
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, and the
proportion
 of
water
 used in
household
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the household
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 category for the lowest in
six
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the six
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 world
area
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areas
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. The
proportion
 of
water
of
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for
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agricultural
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agriculture
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 in Africa, Central and South East Asia were higher than
other
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in other
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area
, which were 84%, 88% and 81% respectively, and South America had 71%.
By contrast
, the two developed
area
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areas
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, North America and Europe were lower than
developing
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the developing
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area
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areas
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, which had 39% and 32% respectively, these figures were even less than 40%.
In contrast
, the
proportion
 of
water
 used in
plant
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plants
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, which developed country more than developing country. in spite of
the
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North
American
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America
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 was less by 5%
with
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than
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 Europe country,
but
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these two countries had 48% and 53%
respectively
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apply
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industrial
water
, compared with
remainder
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the remainder
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countries
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of countries
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 were both nearly 10%, those countries were more than nearly a quadruple. It was noticeable the
proportion
 of household
of
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water
 consumption
were
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was
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lower (all of those below
than
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20%) than other categories in these areas shown in the graph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, water, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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