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percentage of population riding bicycles in one town by age group

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The table compares how many people using bicycles in a city between 5
age
 groups in 2012
Overall
, the ratio of female cyclists was higher than that of males in all
age
 groups. It is noticeable that the highest proportion belonged to children under 9 years old
while
 the vice verse was true for the middle-aged Looking first at the
age
group
 of 0-9, almost half of
children
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 rode bicycles with slight differences in the ratio of
two
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 genders.
However
, the number of girls joining in cycling was 43.6
percent
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 as opposed to that of boys, with 25.1
percent
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. The corresponding figures for teenagers were much lower, with 43.6
percent
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 and around 25
percent
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 in
female
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females
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 and
male
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males
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, respectively.
This
 declining trend went on in the
group
 of 20-39 in which the rates fell from around 43.5 to just north of 18
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 for ladies and 11
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, which was around half as many as that of younger guys, with 20
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 Turning to the other older groups, the least prevalent among the middle-aged
group
 with a modest ratio in the men and women
group
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 was 13.7 and 9.3
percent
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 respectively.
Finally
, it increased significantly
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age
group
 over 60, the number of
female
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females
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 riding
a
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bicycles
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bicycle
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 was just south of 20
percent
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, outnumbering that of
male
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, with 14.6
percent
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Task Achievement
For task achievement, ensure that all parts of the prompt are addressed fully. Provide a balanced analysis of the data, comparing figures accurately without discrepancies, and summarize the information appropriately by selecting and reporting the main features.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on developing a clear, logical structure within your essay. Each paragraph should focus on a distinct aspect of the data, and information should flow naturally from one idea to the next. Connect sentences and ideas using a variety of cohesive devices.
Coherence & Cohesion
Include a clear introduction that sets the context for the table analysis, and always provide a concise conclusion to summarize your observations. Both are crucial for framing your essay and enhancing its readability.

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