Today, some food travels thousands of miles from farms to consumers, Some people think it would be better to our environment and economy if people only eat local food. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the advantages?

It is a hot topic for debate, the majority of people
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local food would be better for our environment and economy.
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of all, it is easily available and always fresh and chemicals free.
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task achievement
Your essay needs to provide a broader range of ideas and more development on the given topic. To improve task response, ensure you address all parts of the prompt, discussing both advantages and disadvantages and stating to what extent one outweighs the other.
coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, make certain that your essay is well-organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Use a range of cohesive devices correctly to structure your arguments more effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • locally produced
  • sustainable farming
  • agricultural exports
  • food miles
  • economic sustainability
  • seasonal produce
  • carbon emissions
  • food sovereignty
  • local economy
  • agro-biodiversity
  • supply chain
  • global trade
  • food security
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