The table below shows the proportion of different categorie of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the proportion of different categorie of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. 

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
A quick glance at the table illustrates what proportion of six different classifications of households living stricken by
poverty
in Australia in 1999. By and large, by far the highest proportion of households were allocated
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% of 232,000 sole parents
while
4% of 48,000 aged couples were relatively well stricken by
poverty
. In terms of taking noteworthy data from the table, there were noticeable modifications in who had
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offspring and who had
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offsprings
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In other words
, it is experienced that people with
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offspring tend to become stricken by
poverty
. As for households without children, the highest percentage were stricken by
poverty
in 1999. With regards to taking a look at another feature, the proportion of classes of families who dominate relatively less stricken
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poverty
in Australia in 1999 was aged couples.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.

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