The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The given diagram illustrates how an Australian town
collect
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collects
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rain
Correct your spelling
rainwater
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water
and
treat
Correct subject-verb agreement
treats
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to
Correct pronoun usage
it to
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be used. Looking from the
overall
perspective, it is apparent that
this
operation has 6 steps. Beginning with
collect
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collecting
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water
from
drain
Correct article usage
the drain
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ending
Correct word choice
and ending
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with
deliver
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delivering
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treated
water
to use. In the first step,
water
from
rains
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rain
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are
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is
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gathered by drains, which are located on
Correct article usage
the houses
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houses
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house's
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roof.
Then
, the
water
following
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follows
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the underground drain system to
water
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the water
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filter, where
water
is clarified before it is delivered to the storage. In the storage,
water
is continued to go to the place called
water
treatment.
Thereafter
,
water
is treated
second
Correct article usage
a second
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times
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time
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by a machine, which
is used
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uses
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appropriate chemicals to
converted
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convert
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dirty
water
into clean
water
that can be used to drink.
As a result
, clean
water
is transported into the local houses and
serve
Correct subject-verb agreement
serves
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their demands.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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