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The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the birthplace rate of
people
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 in
Australia
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 and outside
Australia
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 living in three different
areas
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 over 15 years.
Overall
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, the number of
people
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 born in and outside
Australia
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 and living in city
areas
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 significantly increased.
Moreover
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,
this
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 trend noticeably decreased in rural
areas
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 and towns. In terms of the area with the highest inhabited, the cities are the most popular places for the citizens, which is marked by increasing population rates who were born in
Australia
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 from around 50 to above 60.
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, the societies that were born outside
Australia
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 considerably increased by about 20. Regarding the other two places with lower rates of population, the number of
people
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 who were born in
Australia
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 and living in towns decreased slightly to about 5,
while
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 the societies who were living in rural
areas
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 decreased dramatically from around 30 to 15.
On the other hand
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, the town area inhabited by
people
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 who were born outside
Australia
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 remained steady at 10.
In contrast
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, the population in rural
areas
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 hit a low percentage from 40 to 10.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, australia, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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