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The pie shows the comparision of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

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The two pie charts compare the five various types of
energy
 production manufactured by France
during
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 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, it can be seen that the proportion of coal in 1995 and gas in 2005 is the highest in total. It is noticeable that all the
energy
 sources saw an upward trend, except for petroleum. In 1995, the ratio of gas and coal was the largest part of the total, making up over three-fifths, followed by petroleum at 29.28%. The smallest part belonged to the share of nuclear and other
energy
, which accounted for 6.40% and 4.90%, respectively. Ten years later, there was a slight increase in the ratio of coal and gas by 2%, which remained the highest percentage in total. There is an almost equal ratio of nuclear and other
energy
, increasing to 9% and 10%, respectively.
Although
 all
energy
 sources witnessed a rise, the opposite was true for the proportion of petroleum, which made up 19.55%.
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For task achievement, ensure full coverage of the task's requirements. The essay must accurately address all parts of the prompt, including specific details for each type of energy production for both years. Use of percentages is good, but provide more comparative language and highlight significant changes or trends.
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To improve coherence and cohesion, focus on connecting ideas better through cohesive devices and varied sentence structures. Make clear paragraph transitions and maintain the logical flow of information from introduction to conclusion. Include a clear summary or overview at the beginning or end of the report. Stick to a more conventional report structure for an academic task 1 response.

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