Many people believe that playing games and watching TV programs is beneficial but others say it doesn't improve the mental ability of children. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Children are the backbone of every nation. Many claim that playing
games
and watching TV
series
bring enormous
benefits
to children
whereas
others say that it cannot develop the mental ability of toddlers. I partially agree with
this
statement and
this
essay shall discuss it briefly in the following reasons.
To begin
with, playing
games
and watching television programs are provided more knowledge based on content. When kids play
games
while
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they can get
the
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cretaive
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creative
and innovative ideas and
this
will help
for
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their thinking process
by
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creatively.
For example
, an online chess game can increase
thinking
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process
differntly
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differently
and immediately
along with
the opponent how to think and how to attack,
this
can lead to
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more skills and talents. Toddlers are able to obtain many good qualities from watching TV programs.
Therefore
, these can give more
benefits
.
In contrast
, watching
series
and playing
games
do not improve the
children
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children's
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mental
development
because
this
is only
an
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entertainment and it does not provide any cognitive improvement.
For instance
, education based on programmes can
rise
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the kid's mental
development
instead
of
the
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entertainment
such
as science
exhibition
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and quiz
competitation
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competition
competitions
. If a kid
watching
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series
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on TV, he only enjoys
about
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the movie or
series
rather than he does not think about his knowledge
development
.
To conclude
, the infants watch
series
and play
games
can provide more
benefits
such
as creative ideas and innovative thinking.
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, it does not improve the
infants
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infant's
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mental improvement like cognitive
development
.
Therefore
, I partially agree with
this
statement. I hope
this
drives more
benefits
to kids.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive skills
  • problem-solving
  • critical thinking
  • strategy games
  • educational content
  • reinforce learning
  • excessive screen time
  • mental health
  • attention deficit disorders
  • social isolation
  • foster healthy development
  • interactivity
  • retention of information
  • active participation
  • virtual context
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