The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart compares the proportion of males and females passing their driving exam in a country in Asia from 1980 to 2000.
Overall
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, it is clear the percentage of
women
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who passed the test always was higher than that of their counterparts over the period in question.
Besides
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that, the number of females who passed the driving test in 2000 accounted for the highest rate. Turning into the details, it can be seen that in the first year of the period, there were nearly half of
women
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granted a permit to drive, which was higher than that of men with under 30%. After ten years, the figure for females continued rising slightly to over 50%
while
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the rate for males rose more quickly by around 10%. A similar pattern can be true for the other years. To be more specific, in 2000 the proportion of
women
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passed
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who passed
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the test showed a significant increase to about 70% before dropping by 3% in the final year. The rate for men in 2000
although
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increased to just under 50%, was still lower than that of
women
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.
However
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, in 2010 the figure for males remained unchanged by nearly half.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Pass rate
  • Driving test
  • Trend
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Milestone
  • Comparison
  • Significant difference
  • Broad social changes
  • Policy changes
  • Surpass
  • Reflect
  • Implications
  • Disparity
  • Overall trends
  • Summarize
  • Statistical data
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