The graph below shows the number of boys and girls playing sport in an English town in 2012
The chart shows the number of
boys
and girls playing sport
in an English town in 2012. Which divided
into six categories Add a missing verb
is divided
such
as tennis, badminton, cycling, swimming, football, and hockey.
After overall
analysis, the percentage of boys
playing sport
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sports
mainly
higher except for swimming and badminton. Add a missing verb
was mainly
However
swimming is the most popular Add a comma
However,
sport
among the girls followed by badminton on
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in
the
second place and tennis Correct article usage
apply
on
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in
the
third where it's nearly Correct article usage
apply
same
.
The most Correct article usage
the same
desireable
Correct your spelling
desirable
sport
for boys
are
football, followed by tennis Change the verb form
is
while
hockey has the least enthusiast
neither Correct your spelling
enthusiasm
from
Change preposition
for
boys
and girls.Submitted by bulanhasyim on
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