The graph below shows the number of boys and girls playing sport in an English town in 2012

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The chart shows the number of

boys

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and girls playing

sport

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in an English town in 2012. Which

divided

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into six categories

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as tennis, badminton, cycling, swimming, football, and hockey. After

overall

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analysis, the percentage of

boys

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playing

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sport

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sports

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mainly

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higher except for swimming and badminton.

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However

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swimming is the most popular

sport

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among the girls followed by badminton

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the

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apply

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second place and tennis

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the

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apply

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third where it's nearly

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. The most

desireable

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desirable

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for

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are

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football, followed by tennis

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hockey has the least

enthusiast

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neither

from

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for

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boys

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and girls.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, sport with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

95 words

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The graph below shows the number of boys and girls playing sport in an English town in 2012

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